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Categories Literature > Poetry > General Poetry > Open


1:13 am 9/3/07

because i can never find the perfect words to describe what i want to say.
because i can never figure out what emotion actually makes my heart go nuts
and beat against the cage.
because i'm tired of dedicating phrases, thoughts, words, lyrics, songs,
and other mumbo jumbo to anyone and everyone that passes my way.

i'll always be that same ol' girl. waiting.
yeah. that's right. just waiting.
waiting?
waiting.

and no matter how many times i tell myself i won't let me do that to me anymore
i let me down and me falls down and me breaks down once more.
because i was waiting.

for what? who fucking knows.

and sometimes i just want to understand why i do things the way i do.
and sometimes i wonder why i wonder, wish, and think so much like i do.
and sometimes i hate the things i do.
don't you?
©2007-2010 ~dewdrops
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Author's Comments

aiyah. crap. but...whatever. better written (or typed XP) than not at all.


yeah yeah yeah. forced. blah. give me something to work on. i haven't written much lately. :p

enjoy.


---edit
took out the "&'s"

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~mltryfireman Sep 3, 2007, 1:03:18 AM
I like the repetitious lines in the poem.

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No one ever drowned in sweat.
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~dewdrops Sep 3, 2007, 1:09:38 AM
thank you. :]

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love is the question;
can i be your answer?
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~blue-strawberry Sep 3, 2007, 5:13:15 AM
I... know how you feel.
I actually think its pretty good, very honest, which I like.
I also like the fact you seem to be talking to yourself/ someone else... its really effective:)

--
You have four nostrils, just to let you know.
:iconversino:
~versino Sep 3, 2007, 11:38:40 AM
i like this peom, i'm in a simliar situation myself at the moment.

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those who think small get small, those who think big get big (it will just take a little longer)
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~Irindel Sep 3, 2007, 2:25:27 PM
It's effective but not really good. You wasted the poem by using '&'.

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Read my works, they don't bite ;)
Love Ayla:*
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~dewdrops Sep 3, 2007, 8:33:31 PM
thank you for your criticism. :]

--
love is the question;
can i be your answer?
:icondewdrops:
~dewdrops Sep 3, 2007, 8:33:56 PM
thank you. :]

--
love is the question;
can i be your answer?
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~dewdrops Sep 3, 2007, 8:34:40 PM
thank you. i'm not entirely sure what situation i'm in at the moment, but i'm glad you can relate to it. :]

--
love is the question;
can i be your answer?
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